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My first impression, hilarious and good design. I`m 47 and a woman web designer. The services were immediately apparent to me (in a whole bunch of places) and the navigation is clear. The humor is good but does need to be toned down and strategically placed...business points come first, always.
Two points to consider that haven`t been mentioned. 1) It`s geared primarily toward guys and sweat (and some of the comments are right...parents want to think "sports sweat" and college students want to think of more interesting and fun ways to get sweaty...find the balance.)
2) You need to look at the reluctance a college girl might have in giving some college guys her personal lingerie. I shudder to think of the rumors that could happen (or that they might imagine if you get my drift.) Emphasize discreet and delicate handling and personals and intimates somewhere (and DO you know how to handle blood, silk and other girl laundry problems the same way you know how to handle men`s boxer shorts?)
And just how do you mention something like that on a website without offending sensibilities? Something like "Student Suds understands the secret of keeping Victoria`s Secret items as fresh as the day you bought them" or something like that. Women`s ad always use the words fresh and clean, men`s ads focus on manly and powerful. There are reasons for those word choices with advertisers that have done millions in market research.
But yes, in this McDonald`s and microwave generation, you really do have only a few seconds to grab attention on a website. How about a compromise on the first page dilemma: Why not several large points such as:
Quality laundry services for busy college students
Convenient, affordable plans for laundry & dry cleaning
Clothing cleaned to your exact specifications and preferences
Expert, professional and discreet employees
Easy per semester or yearly payment plans
Free weekly pickup and delivery
More time to enjoy all that college life has to offer you
Look good all the time for less than the price of a coffee and doughnut
and THEN put some of your fun text underneath (scaled down) to use the humor to pull them in. The slogan/tag line "Making ALL Students Freshmen" is great. The simplifying your life part seems kind of obvious. Pick a slogan and put it in bold text so you begin to build a brand identity.
More details on the pricing...my first impression was "whoa, expensive" and you might lose a lot of visitors from those numbers. You MUST put $239.99 PER SEMESTER or you`ll kill yourself out of the box.
If I did my math right, it`s like $1.99 - $2.48 a day. Market it that way because that`s a morning trip to Starbucks to keep good care of expensive clothes and THAT will appeal to parents and students alike...poor laundering can ruin expensive clothes in a heartbeat. As in "clothes are too expensive to ruin when you`re sleep deprived during finals week, let us help you keep your investment as sharp as your grades!" (i.e., go for the parental jugular if you will.)
Yes, one size point up on the font...1 pt is too small for some and anything that irritates on the intro page loses you website visitors. 2 pt is pretty acceptable to most eyeballs. Too large screams at people and too small forces people to work to hard to read....both irritate.
I also would not repeat the description (like the sumo wrestler blurb) once they`ve clicked on the actual plan, no need to duplicate. Just put the number of items and perhaps a tiny bit of copy that would indicate that the plan is perfect for their lifestyle (obviously, a bit different for each blurb but sell them a bit under each plan as to why they want to click that "buy now" button.)
Bet you wish you`d never posted this by now...hahahaha
Good luck, it`s a dynamite idea!
Actually, I loved the copy...Was very interesting to me. However...
On your main page you should break out your text into some sections to help people`s eyes navigate your page:
What is it?
How it works?
How to get it?
I think you can use your current copy and instead of deleting, break it out into easier to read paragraphs.
Services is okay, but it seems like you`re currently only selling one service, that is washing clothes...So, in that regard, you really should have an obvious place that people can click and Sign up for your service..OR, make it a little more catchy, like "Gotta have it now" button...I dunno, just some quick thoughts.
I very much like your layout and coloring and everything else. Just like everyone else has said, what you "REALLY" want people to do, regardless of everything that`s on there, is click the buy now button. That`s the bottom line, and you`re going to want to steer people as fast as possible to that in the most clear and pleasant, entertaining, however you do it, just the most efficient way in to the "buy now" area.
You may also think about under the paragraph section addressing the parents directly, "Parents read this!" and then put info about how the parents can pay for it and set the plan up for their kids.
Hope my input helps...
We don`t have a website up yet...we`re too busy designing everyone elses.
I would rearange your text on the index page. That`s because the average web surffer won`t read all the way to the bottom of the page to find out about your service.
Being a student is a blast. Parties, frats, sports, beer, new friends, late nights, late mornings, beer, beer, and laundry.
Yes, you want to appeal to both parents and students. The photo and logo are fabulous. The copy IS entertaining, and that`s good, but, remember, your customers are probably as busy as I am, and there is just way too much copy. I got tired of reading it before I got to the bottom line. Also, let me say, that I did NOT see the semester plan and yearly plan checkboxes on the right the first time through. I did not know they were there until I read about them in the critques. My first thought when I saw the prices was "OMG...NO WAY! That CAN`T be for one load of laundry!!??" I would put that where it is totally visible with the plan.
Light Plan $239 / semester, $469 / year
Maybe this was explained in the copy, but, if so, it gets lost. That little faded green box on the right will not stand out to all your customers, and you may lose some. Also, when you say that you will pick the laundry up on a designated day, specify that this is weekly or bi-weekly or whatever...your customers should not have to wonder or assume anything. Tuition, books, etc. are so expensive, let everyone know that this cool service is affordable with the first click!
Best of Luck to you!
I think that should stay on the first page because budding entrepreneurs love to know right away that the possibility is there. I hate looking for where the service is, so having it on the first page is invaluable. Just my 2 cents.
idea. I like the website. I found it very easy to maneuver
but I`m a little lost....is it any college/university in any state?
Also, anything over $100.00 was realllllly expensive to me when
I was in college and I definately relate to the "sniff test" -
sometimes even money for the laundrymat was expensive. I think it
would be great if you offered gift certificates....did I miss that?
If I did, I apologize. And if someone else already
suggested it my apologies - I didn`t read the 6 pages of comments you
received from everybody.
Good luck!!
I`m not sure if you have implemented changes to your site since posting your request but i love what i see, I think it great! And as a mother of a child who will go to college in two years, I clearly understand your concept and content and would purchase your service. My only question is, Who are you? The "About" page is important to me when deciding to do business with someone online. I want to see that the individual or company is not hiding its identity. I think your story is cleverly written but I still don`t know who are and would choose not to do business with your site for that reason. ~;o)
Otherwise, great site and concept!!
Bevla Reeves
www.hairconspiracy.com