New Site - Novice Seeks Advice..

I just launched my new site www.sayitwithicecream.com. It is an ice cream cake/treat delivery site geared towards folks that want to send a message in a unique way...write it on a cake. It is perfect for parents of college students away from home who want to wish them Happy Birthday or for Businesses to send a unique "thank you" etc.... I am new to eccommerce and would love some honest feedback. This is still a work in progress and I know I am missing some keywords on some pages but any advice would be welcomed.
Kellie
Kellie
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Thank you sooo much. Very helpful info. I appreciate you taking the time to look and give me advice.
Kellie
Thanks a bunch. I read your posts often and truly respect your opinion. I do have a bricks and mortar store and after I read your comments and go back to my site, can see how I am not pulling them to a direct action.
I love this community, everyone has such great ideas. Thanks again. Come back to the site in a few weeks after I rework it.....Have a wonderful labor day.
Kellie
I don`t like the small font, but that is my 50+ year old eyes.
Don`t use contractions. They don`t translate for people who don`t speak English well, or for visually-challenged people using a text to voice reader. Especially when you don`t use them correctly. ("You`re" when you mean "your" the possessive. You`re is a contraction of `you are`).
Most of your text is also loaded with a lot of punctuation and capitalization errors.
Who writes these wordy rambling "privacy policies"??? Yours is one of the worst I`ve seen. Why don`t you just say: "We respect your privacy (LOL) and we will use your information any damn way we want unless you opt-out after the fact. Oh, and you`ll have to look hard to find the opt-out option because we hid it somewhere that you will never look."
What do you really mean?