RockLobster subscriber Posts: 2
edited October 2006 in Website Critique
I would love some feedback on my new website
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P.S. I left a message on your voice mail.
My two cents! All the best,
1. Redefining the poker game. Are you really doing this? Or are you redefining the poker experience? I think you`re redefining the experience, not the game. At any rate, most people won`t pay attention to such statements because the entire idea of redefining something is pretty worn out.
2. Proof-reading is very important. Your main heading says "What`s We Do:". This is not correct grammar. It should read "What We Do" and omit the colon.
3. "We feel that is shouldn`t cost a fortune to host a first class poker game." You need to change the "is" to "it". Even better if you say "It shouldn`t cost a fortune to host a first class poker game." In fact, you could say that below the heading and then have a brief list of your services.